Archive:VOCJ54 Proof

Intro

Please look for any problems and list them in the category below (with name of article, page number, and the problem) so they can be fixed. They will be crossed off as they are fixed.

Yet to finish (so don't mention it yet!)

• Colour photos at start of sections
• Some ads
• Exec pages

Suggestions of what to look for

Style Edits

• Long dashes should be used to separate phrases. Flag any short dashes.
• Double quotes are used to indicate conversation or colloquial speech; single quotes indicate definitions. Flag any inappropriate quotation marks.
• Distances are indicated by the number, a space, then the unit (i.e., 400 m, rather than 400m). Flag any un-spaced distances.
• Periods are followed by a single space. Flag any double spaces.
• People should be identified by their full names at least once during an article. Flag any anonymous people.

Grammar and Spelling Edits

• Look for run-on sentences and other grammar problems. Flag any you see.
• 'Prusik' is the proper spelling. Flag any wrong ones.

Photos

• Each photo should have rounded corners. Flag square corners.
• Each photo should have two captions indicating what is happening and who is involved (below), and the photographer (right). Flag any missing or bad captions.
• Photos should be reasonably 'legible'. Flag any bad photos that don't add to the story or the journal.
• Photos should have decent spacing to separate them from the surrounding text. Flag any photos that are too close to the article text.
• Locations should make sense. Flag any photos that are in a weird spot.

Spacing and font

• Every article should begin with a dropped letter. Flag articles missing a dropped letter at the start.
• Every article should end with a diamond character. Flag missing diamond characters.
• Some paragraphs have a dropped letter to break up the page a bit; these should be located at fairly natural spots (the start of a new thought, a new day, etc). Flag any unnatural dropped letters.
• Fonts should be consistent! There is a font for the body, a font for the title/subtitle/author, a font for captions, and a font for the photographer. Flag any wrong fonts.
• Empty pages! There shouldn't be any.
• Empty lines at the top of pages! There shouldn't be any.

Organization

• Are articles in the appropriate category?
• Are articles in a good order?

Table of Contents

• Every article, in order, correct page, correct title/author.

List errors here

List the page number, the article, and the error, under the appropriate section.

example: p.7, President's Message: Katherine's name is spelled 'Kathewilehtklhetkle.' It should be 'Katherine.'

General/Global

• Many (or all?!) of the photos appear fuzzy when zoomed in. Perhaps this is the same thing that happened last year? There was some box that needed to be checked, something like "Include photos in full resolution" or something of the sort (check with Kathrin).
  • All photos are full-res, linked, and good to go. I just uploaded the incredibly low-res pdf. The full version is ridiculously large and could not have been sent over email or uploaded to google docs. -k.
• Did u intentionally want the journal to not be justified?
  • ? What do you mean? -k.
• Dropped letters in articles: Do these need flagging? They appear to be a section break, perhaps a space between those paragraphs should be added.
  • They are intended to show a bit of a section break without adding an extra space. If it looks bad then I can go back to extra spaces, but that will require quite a lot of rearranging so let's only do that if we really think it's necessary. More votes, anyone? -k.

Table of Contents and Starting Material

• Remove dates from titles in TOC and also in the articles themselves. It doesn't matter when exactly most trips happened. (Gili suggested this, but Veenstra disagrees strongly. Maybe from the TOC for style reasons, but having the date the trip happened is exceedingly useful if you're ever trying to use old VOCJs to help with trip planning, as I've done many times, or if any historian ever looks at the journal trying to work out historic weather patterns etc. It would be a real shame to remove such useful information because we don't like the formatting. Probably those 20 characters have the highest utility of any in the whole article. You could replace it with "3rd week in May" or something, but that probably looks even worse.) Gili: most articles don't have this information in the title, so it looks weird in the TOC, perhaps keep for the titles but not TOC.

Skiing and Winter Mountaineering

• p 145. "On snowshoes and skate shoes was all that they had." - maybe add a dash after skate shoes? Or "[...]and skate shoes - t'was all that they had."
• p 148, line 14. "our boots. We then"; current version needs full stop and space.
• p 148-149 - Could the footnote spanning both pages be located entirely on pg 148?
• p 149, line 11 - there are two periods instead of one.
• p 162. Photo credit: Ran Zhang, with an H in Zhang.
• p 165, line 9 - remove 'would'.
• p 170, line 8 from the bottom - 'skinning' instead if 'skiing'?
• p 173, line 10 from the bottom - down 'to' the logging road, not 'at'.
• p 174, last sentence of article. How about "If Marcin hadn’t been able to walk, it would have been too late to be evacuated that day - we had been at least seven

hours away from cell phone reception." (?)

• p 176-177. Black Tusk and Cinder Cone via Helm Creek: Any way we could slightly reduce the font size of the poem in the middle so it fits on lines nicely?
• p 178 - end of para 2. Incomplete sentence.
• p 180, line 5 - change comma to '-'.
• p 180, line 6 - 1AM instead of 1am.
• p 182, remove comma(s) in first sentence of para.
• p 182, last para, repetition of 'run' in sentence. "[...] for a few more turns." (?)
• p 205, line 6. To be closer to the truth - "Piotr's entire binding was moving relative to his ski (something that ...)" Two out of the four screws had sheared completely. Beginning of next para: "the ski could not be fixed in a fashion worthy of its newness, we promptly opted to have an easy ski day"
• p 205, para 2, line 11 - 'tested' to 'test'
• p 206, line 10 - 'o' to 'of' or ' o' '
• p 206, line 18 - remove 'the' from highway 99
• p 206, line 24 - and 'that' he would drive them (?)
• p 207, line 12 - something strange about the spacing in " she'd "

Land and Water

• p 325, line 6 - remove one of the "at"s.. (?)
• p 332. Is the font on this page 100% the same as elsewhere? Does the graphic need a black square around it? Piotr would (personally) prefer it without...
• p 336. No colon after "Renfrew and the West Coast Trail" tomatch other subtitles

Club Life and Reflections

• pg 393, missing Oxford comma, 4th paragraph, "Goretex, down sleeping bags, and light tents..."
• pg 397, item 20 should have quotation after period after ski; item 25 has extra comma after year
• pg 408, mountaineering camp section, VOCers stood on all those peaks on Saturday not Sunday